Premise: Poem Draft 1

For my premise project I wanted to use a poem to help narrator the story of the Stars. It was bit of a challenge but after sometime I was able to come up with something but I didn't plan on making the poem 13 verses along! The rhythming structure I used is AABBCD and any feed back is welcomed.

 How The Stars Came To Be
If you have ever wondered, just like me, 
How the stars came to be 
Who was it that put them there 
And made them sparkle so fair? 
What was it that makes them shine in that inky night sky? 
While we are in our beds laying asleep at night 

The story begins with two characters I feel you know 
Two rulers of the sky both dressed in royal robes 
The Sun and the Moon are the reason for the stars 
But I am sad to say that it was not a romantic start 
This is the story of how one crossed the line 
And was taught a lesson by the other 

The Sun, you see, is a King in gold 
Who would not settle for anything old 
As he made each day shiny and new 
And that anything had been used once in his view 
Was not worth using again as it was tainted with the views of yesterday 
And that nothing should be dull in his kingdom in the sky 

Every day that he made was warm and bright 
And, as is common with the Sun, was filled with light 
He felt so important as he looked down from the sky 
That you can imagine that his smile was 10 feet high 
It is no surprise that he freely boosted about it 
However, there was another who not impressed by his ways 

Moon on the other hand was quiet, clam and reserved 
A Queen in silver who is never loud had found him quit absurd 
And over time become quit tried of the Sun and his vein ways 
It was as if he was in constant need of praise 
It is no surprise then that she sometimes disappears from the night sky. 
I don’t blame her if I had to put up with that all the time 

So, as you can see 
Two very different beings 
Who ruled in the sky and controlled our day and night 
But it was clear that the two of them where heading for a fight 
It was one particular encounter in the sky 
That gave as the stars and a reason why vanity never wins 

It was one time when the Sun and Moon crossed paths 
That resulted in the starry filled aftermath 
The two sat side by side and watched the Earth as it whirled 
But Sun was bored just sitting there watching world 
And after some thought a simple idea came to mind and that was to increase his ego 
So he chose to give irritating Moon ago to see what she would do 

“You know” said Sun to Moon “I think it’s clear that I’m better than you” 
Moon, knowing this as a boost, rolled her eyes “And how have you come to that point of view?” 
The Sun did smile and say “The people down belong, when I’m around, always put on a show. 
But with you, dear Moon, it seems that everyone is a bit of a no show” 
Moon did not care about popularity or the way people treated her night 
“They need to sleep some place calm and I kindly give them that” 

Sun just laughed which angered Moon more 
He seemed determined to find something that would strike her to the core 
And so, he started looking around for something new mock, just begging for more 
Soon, it hit him, the one thing that set them apart Sun knew would make Moon feel sore 
Without thinking of what he was doing, what Sun said next would change everything forever 
“My day full of life and forever bright, your night on the other hand is boring and dull” 

This was the final straw and it was time the Sun should pay! 
“I can make the night shine brighter than your day!” 
Exclaimed the Moon as she swiped the crown upon his head 
And before the Sun could get it back the Moon did something that filled him with dread 
She threw the crown as hard as could in to the night sky 
Where it suddenly shattered in to a million pieces 

Glittering yellow and sparkling gold 
The jewels from the crown spend crossed the sky as they rolled 
The Sun stood in shock and awe at the sight 
What were these crystal lights? 
“Behold!” said Moon as she stood before Sun 
“The brightest night sky that can out do your day!” 

Sun didn’t know what to say 
As he watched the new lights find their place to stay 
He suddenly knew down in his heart 
That no matter what he did he could not compete with this work of art 
Moon just watched, waiting for Sun to respond 
He just turned away and didn’t say a word 

Nowadays, it’s a lot quieter in the sky 
And I do find it funny I’m not going to lie 
That one person’s vanity and another’s course of action 
Would result in such a beautiful reaction 
It’s hard to say if the Sun and Moon are still friends but if it wasn’t for this fight 
We wouldn’t have the story of how stars came to be

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